Let's help Greg complete his signature... 3

[SantaMufasa]

Each time I see a posting from fellow MAI-er/STC-er, Greg (GBaughma), ending with his signature:

There once was a man from Peru
Who wanted to write a Haiku
But...

...it always leaves me yearning for the other shoe to drop.

So, to help resolve my yearning, I came up with my own "shoe"

There once was a man from Peru
Who wanted to write a Haiku
But, unlucky for him,
It was not just a whim,
Limericks were all he could do.

...And, out of respect for The Man from Peru, I thought that I would try it in Spanish, as well.

Había un Don de Perú

Que quiso escribir un Haiku
Malo suerte de él
No capricho eras
Versos Jocosos fueron todo hacer.

I invite Latinos to correct mi gramática española.


In the meantime, just for fun, I invite all of you Longfellows out there to produce some alternate complements to Greg's initial work.

Mufasa
(aka Dave of Sandy, Utah, USA)
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[Ronster]

There was a guy from
Limerick who wrote a
Haiku for a trick


Ronster

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[addy]

There once was a man from Peru
Who wanted to write a Haiku
But he drank too much water
So he thought that he ought to
Go upstairs and make use of the loo.

 

[traingamer]

To put a 17th syllable in Ronsters:

There once was a guy
from Limerick who wrote a
Haiku for a trick

 

[guitarzan]

To expand on Ronster/traingamer... A double-haiku limerick?

There once was a guy
from Limerick who wrote a
Haiku for a trick

He tried to combine
Both at one time. The result
Was not very slick

 

[SantaMufasa]

Waaaay Cooool, Guitarzan...Well done!...It's either a Hai-rick ("Hi, Dave!") or a Limericku.

Mufasa
(aka Dave of Sandy, Utah, USA)
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[MCuthill]

~chuckles~

I like "Limricku" Santa.



Mike
______________________________________________________________
"It Seems All My Problems Exist Between Keyboard and Chair"

 

[traingamer]

Guitarzan and his jungle band
They're all you can stand
Give 'em a hand Guitarzan

 

[SantaMufasa]

My conscience won't let me rest until I acknowledge (with a

) Guitarzan's whole new poetic artform discovery: Limericku.

Mufasa
(aka Dave of Sandy, Utah, USA)
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[donbott]

There once was a man from Peru
Who wanted to write a Haiku
But along came a spider
A keyboard resider
What's the poor typist to do?

DonBott

"The whole problem with the world is that fools and fanatics are always so certain of themselves, and wiser people so full of doubts."
--Bertrand Russell

 

[Trevoke]

There once was a man from Peru
Who wanted to write a Haiku
But the wording was lame
And the rhymes all the same
His muse said, "Only prose for you!"

Tao Te Ching Discussions : Chapter 4 (includes links to previous chapters)

 

[guitarzan]

Limericku it is then Thanks for the stars!!

 

[Lunatic]

BTW... you guys *do* realize that my "unfinished limerick" about wanting to write a haiku *HAS* 17 syllables....

-There once was a man from Peru
Who wanted to write a Haiku
but...

Do limericks usually have 17 syllables?


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[traingamer]

Argh - it's a finished haiku. It's all a joke about it being a limerick.


(Maybe it's a Greg thing.)

Greg
"Personally, I am always ready to learn, although I do not always like being taught." - Winston Churchill

 

[traingamer]

Rhetorical questions gleefully answered...

 

[Lunatic]

I thought that might be the reason, but I was really confused because it isn't a haiku. Not even close.

A haiku has a very rigid structure. The total number of syllables is irrelevent if it doesn't follow the structure.

1st line = 5 syllables
2nd line = 7 syllables
3rd line = 5 syllables

It doesn't matter if there are 17 or not if each line doesn't fit (I've also seen a 3, 5, 3 form as well - they call this free-form and is mostly an English modification of the Japanese style - something to do with English needing fewer syllables to say the same thing).

There once was a man from Peru
Who wanted to write a Haiku
but...

There are:
1st line = 8 syllables
2nd line = 8 syllables
3rd line = 1 syllable

That isn't a haiku. You wouldn't call it a sonnet if it didn't fit these rules:
* 14 lines
* Iambic Pentameter
* static rhyme scheme

So how can you call it a haiku if it doesn't follow the haiku rules?

I guess thats what I'm having a hard time understanding. I can see it as artistic, poetic, and the like, but I can't see how you can call it haiku...

Sometimes I get tunnel vision...

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[traingamer]

oops it's not correct
I mistook it for haiku
sonnets are no fun


I'll be quiet now.

 

[AnotherHiggins]

Looney:
In his post dated 17 Apr 07 18:19, Santa pointed out:

We would have noticed it earlier had it read:

There once was a man
from Peru who wanted to
Write a Haiku but...

The problem is, I've never seen a "Haiku butt" before. <grin>

It has the correct number of syllables to be a haiku and the subject is haiku, but it is presented in the style and meter of a limerick.

It's a poem-pun. A poun.

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[gbaughma]

Well, *I* thought it was funny...

If it had been in Haiku format 5-7-5, you wouldn't have visually and meter-wise recognized it as a limerick....



Just my 2¢
-There once was a man from Peru
Who wanted to write a Haiku
but...

--Greg

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[Lunatic]

I guess I'll just have to take your word on it. Not that it should surprise me, a lot of what goes on here is over my head. I just can't get beyond it not following the 5,7,5 structure.

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[AnotherHiggins]

I don't mean to be condescending, Lunatic, but do you understand the rules of a limerick?

From the entry at wikipedia:

A limerick is a five-line poem with a strict meter, popularized by Edward Lear. The rhyme scheme is usually "A-A-B-B-A", with a rather rigid meter. The first, second, and fifth lines are three metrical feet; the third and fourth are two metrical feet (One metrical foot is equal to 3 syllables; the line pattern goes 9-9-6-6-9). The foot used is usually the amphibrach, a stressed syllable between two unstressed ones. However, it can be considered an anapestic foot, two short syllables and then a long, the reverse of dactyl rhythm. However, many substitutions are common.

The first line traditionally introduces a person and a location, and usually ends with the name of the location, though sometimes with that of the person. A true limerick is supposed to have a kind of twist to it. This may lie in the final line, or it may lie in the way the rhymes are often intentionally tortured, or in both. Though not a strict requirement, many limericks additionally show some form of internal rhyme, often alliteration, sometimes assonance or another form of rhyme.

Sometimes lines 1,2 and 5 only have 8 syllables, as is the case here.

So the humor comes from starting off a traditional limerick about a guy who wants to write a haiku, then seeming to stop the limerick in the middle - but by stopping in the middle Greg has managed to actually produce a functional haiku - the subject of the incomplete limerick.

As I said before - it is a poem pun.

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