Quiet fewer of "Ewer" 2

[Ladyazh]

Who can recall what "Ewer" is without looking anywhere online?

 

[SantaMufasa]

Don, since I have a slight phobia of "pins and needles", I feel your pain. To put you out of your misery, here is the definition (but hidden for those that still want to "play".)

[hide]Main Entry: etui
Pronunciation: A-'twE, 'A-"
Function: noun
Inflected Form(s): plural etuis
Etymology: French étui
: a small ornamental case[/hide]

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[Welshbird]

Phew. I'm glad we knew the word in the same meaning. I was starting to get worried!

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[Thadeus]

Thank you 2ffat.

Nobody else, huh? No accounting for poetic tastes...

~Thadeus

 

[gbaughma]

Thadeus:

Very nice poem.

From the sewer, to the ewer, poets writing such prose, are getting fewer and fewer.



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Who wanted to write a Haiku
but...

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[dgillz]

An "etui" is a needle case, often very ornamental.

http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/etui

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[mmerlinn]

Thadeus

I noticed that you used what seems to me to be a very unusual rhyming scheme in your poem. And it follows in all three verses.

Line by line this is what I see:

1.
2.
3. rhymes with 1.
4. rhymes with 2.
5.
6.
7.
8. rhymes with 6.
9. rhymes with 5.
10. rhymes with 7.

I noticed how the last six lines have an unusual interleaving of rhymes.

Very unusual and VERY good.


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[CajunCenturion]

In the parlance, the rhyming scheme would be described as:

ababcdedce

Yes, it's very unusual and very good.

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[Thadeus]

Thank you for noticing.

I was only trying to be punny when I mentioned that I'd written an Ode to a Grecian Ewer... playing on Keats' Ode on a Grecian Urn. When called to represent the work, I had to go find out how to write an Ode first, so I looked at Keats' work for the first time in 20+ years.

He used the following schemes in his 5 stanzas:
ABABCDEDCE
ABABCDECED
ABABCDECDE
ABABCDECDE
ABABCDEDCE

I decided to choose on one of them and use it all the way through...
ABABCDEDCE was the one he used in the first stanza, so that's the one I chose.

As I read a little more, it was noted that another feature of an Ode is that there ought not be a repeated rhyme sound outside of the couplet. So once the '-ench' sound has been paired in 'wrench' and 'quench', it should not appear at the end of any other rhyme... I fudged a tiny bit in 'ewer', 'sewer', 'hammer', and 'clamor', but I feel that since I married those rhymes in multiple syllables, that they are sufficiently different.

Interestingly, Keats' ABAB portions are quite dodgy in the rhymes. ex.

Who are these coming to the sacrifice?
To what green altar, O mysterious priest,
Lead'st thou that heifer lowing at the skies,
And all her silken flanks with garlands drest?

Those are a bit of a stretch for my ear.

So I took it as a challenge and produced my ode in almost exactly 4 hours, while working.

I was (and am) pleased.

Thank you for noticing the effort that went into it.
~Thadeus

 

[CajunCenturion]

Excellent work Thadeus, and thanks for sharing.

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