Comma before whereby?

[UniqueFD]

Should I add a comma before 'whereby' in the following clause?

Employees will be subject to Compulsory Maternity Leave whereby they will not be permitted to work for 2 weeks after their baby has been born (4 weeks for factory workers).



Tony
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[2ffat]

I say, NO.


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[SamBones]

Another "No" here. It reads fine as is to me.

 

[SkipVought]

You are making a statement of policy and a statement of policy consequence. Therefore, in order to emphasize each, I'd break this into two statements.

Employees will be subject to Compulsory Maternity Leave. Consequently, they will not be permitted to work for 2 weeks after their baby has been born (4 weeks for factory workers).

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[mintjulep]

Factory workers must take 4 weeks of maternity leave after the birth of their baby.
Non-factory workers must take 2 weeks of maternity leave after the birth of their baby.

 

[Mike Lewis]

Just to add my €0,02 worth:

Every worker must take maternity leave after the birth of her baby: four weeks for factory workers, two weeks for others.

Mike

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[SamBones]

I'm sorry, but those suggestions clarify it much too much. To be proper corporate policy, it should read something like this...

With the exception of workers that have not had a baby, all employees must take two weeks maternity leave, unless they are factory workers, who's time is double that.

 

[Mike Lewis]

No good, Sam. I only had to read your suggestion twice in order to understand it. However, it serves as a good starting point. How about something like this:

All workers, including but not limited to factory workers, are required to take maternity leave, such leave to be taken on or immediately after the birth of their baby (or babies in the case of multiple births), for a period of two weeks, except in the case of factory workers, for whom the period of said maternity leave is four weeks. Nothing in this regulation shall apply to employees who are male.

Mike



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[Andrzejek]

You cannot – legally – exclude males from this regulation. That’s a sexist approach.
I like the use of at least one ‘shall’, although disappointed of the lack of any use of ‘therein’, ‘thereof’, ‘herein’, and such.



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[Mike Lewis]

Andy, to overcome your objection, I would add the ever-useful, "... except as required by law."

Mike

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[SamBones]

I like the direction this is going, but my place of employment seems to always add this at the end of regulations like that...

Failure to comply may be punishable up to and including termination.

This will guarantee that people won't just gloss over it and will waste maximum time trying to understand whether it applies to them or not.

 

[Mike Lewis]

Nearly there. But we just need to make it clear who is being terminated. Is it the employee or the person granting or denying the maternity leave (or is it even the aforementioned baby or babies)? Any thoughts?

Mike

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[mintjulep]

On a serious note:

Do adopting parents qualify? If yes then is "immediately after the birth" the correct starting point?